tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3503030921127487367.post7789551787252820202..comments2023-07-13T08:19:14.092+01:00Comments on Daniel Reason's Blog: From Script to Screen - Idea developmentdreason479http://www.blogger.com/profile/08160867191338656831noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3503030921127487367.post-54873446310410291102015-01-19T18:52:22.508+00:002015-01-19T18:52:22.508+00:00I was thinking about having him narrate over the f...I was thinking about having him narrate over the flashback, and maybe have a few flashes to the detective he carried away with the wheelbarrow. Thank you. :)<br />dreason479https://www.blogger.com/profile/08160867191338656831noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3503030921127487367.post-87239964459855110202015-01-19T16:34:18.864+00:002015-01-19T16:34:18.864+00:00As I said earlier today I like the idea of the sto...As I said earlier today I like the idea of the story being told in flashbacks. You don't have to restrict yourself to a linear time-frame.<br /><br />Maybe the serial killer could audibly narrate the flashback? Not every moment, but the key points.Spacer176https://www.blogger.com/profile/04901760829312108610noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3503030921127487367.post-8049762661963079942015-01-16T13:43:33.392+00:002015-01-16T13:43:33.392+00:00Hi Mark.
Thanks for your feedback. I think it'...Hi Mark. <br />Thanks for your feedback. I think it's necessary to cut parts out of the scenes for them to fit into the one minute, if I do continue with this idea. I will explore the possibility of making the serial killer more comedic. I agree that Jack Nicholson would be a good source of inspiration. Hopefully, I can get these issues, especially the length of each scene and use of prop/setting sorted. Thank you. :)dreason479https://www.blogger.com/profile/08160867191338656831noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3503030921127487367.post-13223562939059444432015-01-15T23:21:58.011+00:002015-01-15T23:21:58.011+00:00Hi dan
Some impressive thoughts gone into these a...Hi dan<br /><br />Some impressive thoughts gone into these and I think as a project this could be a very gripping story. The main issue I'm seeing is that due to the dialogue and the action, scenes two and three feel like they could fill one minute on their own if not more so the best suggestions I can give are to either focus on one of these acts while bringing your elements into more focus, or search around for another idea. So I agree with Phil that your prop and location should perhaps feature more. They have involvement in their respective scenes but perhaps their presence should be more over-arching.<br /><br />The scenes you describe also feel more like acts. Scene 2 for instance I can see five areas that would count as scenes (house exterior, bedroom, dark room, garden, porch/hallway) rather than the entire section being one scene.<br /><br />Perhaps look into Jack Nicholson's performances; It's still dark but if I remember his acting did get a few laughs from classmates when we saw The Shining.Spacer176https://www.blogger.com/profile/04901760829312108610noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3503030921127487367.post-9323236439865500942015-01-15T10:47:24.997+00:002015-01-15T10:47:24.997+00:00Hi Phi.
Do you think it would a good idea to show...Hi Phi. <br />Do you think it would a good idea to show the photobooth and what really happened when he's talking about it in Scene 3, or is that too cliché? I did think that scene 3 seems a bit too long, so I will obviously need to do some tweaking. I have thought of making the serial killer a bit more fun, and easy to relate to, so obviously I still have some more thinking to do.dreason479https://www.blogger.com/profile/08160867191338656831noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3503030921127487367.post-64283704030090781052015-01-15T07:40:41.779+00:002015-01-15T07:40:41.779+00:00Hi Dan - good to see you getting some thoughts dow...Hi Dan - good to see you getting some thoughts down on here. I would just remind you of the one minute running time - in that final scene alone you've got so much stuff to make available to the audience, I don't think it's practical - and likewise, yes, the wheelbarrow etc isn't really being used in a transformative way. The tone of your story is very dark - but serial killers can be used for comic effect too.<br /><br />The Photo Booth is being used as a location, so maybe it needs to feature more - might it not be the way the killer is choosing his victims? I can help but think about this movie as a reference:<br /><br />https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=vjIBX5RrG4Qtutorphilhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11842833126210822641noreply@blogger.com